POEM #1

I wrote a poem. I know that it sucks but hey, it's only my first one please I only want useful critiques.

It's called:

To be Thin

To be thin

You skip din

Do not cheat

To receive treat

Satisfaction

To have fashion

Cravings destroyed

To have joy

To be thin

When I talk about fashion, I'm referring to the fact that I would love to look good in anything that I wear. And I know that the third to last line and that the second to last line don't really rhyme that well. Oh well, next time I'll try harder.